Friday, November 8, 2013
Preview for "The Originals" that I wrote for Her Campus :)
http://www.hercampus.com/school/kean/preview-originals-test-loyalty-egos-and-love
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Monday, April 8, 2013
Summary based on the article by Tom Wolfe "The Birth of 'The New Journalism'; Eyewitness Report."
In this article Tom Wolfe explains that New Journalism was something he did not fully understand until he saw other popular writers, such as Thomas B. Morgan, Brock Browser, and Gal Talese use this new style of writing in their articles. After reading work from these writers, he started to grasp the concept that this writing was extremely unique in the sense that it had a story format. New Journalism he says is "artistic". When someone creates an art piece, especially one they enjoy doing, they invest so much energy in it. They express themselves in their work, and leave it to tell the theme behind it, or the main idea behind the piece.
New Journalism gives people the same opportunity an artist gets in their work. It allows the writer to add plenty of detail, examples, interviews, go into history if they desire to do so, and just drag their reader in. New Journalism is so rich in detail that once someone reads the piece, they can't put it down. Traditional Journalism allows for less expression and is very dry, but New Journalism adds a spice that makes it more memorable. So based on all these benefits, Tom Wolfe makes it clear that he fully supports this new phenomenon.
New Journalism gives people the same opportunity an artist gets in their work. It allows the writer to add plenty of detail, examples, interviews, go into history if they desire to do so, and just drag their reader in. New Journalism is so rich in detail that once someone reads the piece, they can't put it down. Traditional Journalism allows for less expression and is very dry, but New Journalism adds a spice that makes it more memorable. So based on all these benefits, Tom Wolfe makes it clear that he fully supports this new phenomenon.
Saturday, March 9, 2013
Summary based on the article "How to Craft Compelling Characters."
This article provides great key points to look for when you have a list of characters for your story. You want to make your characters memorable and these key points will help. The things to make sure characters have are: a driving need, desire, ambition or goal, a secret, a contradiction, and a vulnerability. All authors include these factors in their stories, which keeps people reading the same stories more than once.
From the writersdigest.com
From the writersdigest.com
Summary based on the article "How to Write Effective Supporting Characters."
This article provides great advice on how to develop characters in a story and the proper ways to do so. These tips include : balancing character traits, tormenting your hero, flashing out the supporting cast, naming supporting characters, introducing minor characters and adding authenticity. Some of these tips can be used in developing plays as well and not just books.
From writersdigest.com
From writersdigest.com
Summary based on the article "7 Things That Will Doom Your Novel (&How to Avoid Them)."
This article provided great tips on how to avoid problems while writing stories. These seven tips are: wait for inspiration, look over your shoulder, ignore the craft, keep a chip on your shoulder, write for the market only, take as many short cuts as possible, and quit. I strongly agree with the last one because I can relate to it, but not when it comes to writing a story. I can relate to this during my daily life because there are times when I am consumed with so much work, that I want to throw in the towel (sometimes). I know that I need to just get through it and not give up. I need to push myself and that is what everyone needs to do in order to be successful.
From writersdigest.com
From writersdigest.com
Comments based on the article "She's right on the money Dee Hoty stars in new comedy 'Rich Girl' at George Street Playhouse."
1. Headline: "She's right on the money Dee Hoty stars in new comedy 'Rich Girl' at George Street Playhouse."
Byline: Charles Paolino
Date: March 8, 2013.
Publication name: Home News Tribune
Link: http://www.mycentraljersey.com/article/20130308/NJENT/303080005/She-s-right-money?nclick_check=1
2. This article provides brief information about Dee Hoty and the plays she starred in like "Mama Mia." She also starred in a very popular show "Law and Order."They even provide information about the her current play and comments about being in the acting business.
3. A. The only person interviewed in this story is Dee Hoty. The interview with Hoty was essential, especially since the story is about her, but they could have interviewed some of her previous cast mates. They could have interviewed people from the television shows and old plays she starred in.
B. The vocabulary was very easy to understand. I found the sentences to be very precise and a great example of this is when the writer discusses some of the awards and plays she starred in. It states "Dee Hoty has been nominated for Tony awards for her performances in "The Will Rogers Follies," "The Best Little Whorehouse Goes Public" and "Footloose."
C. The best direct quotation is included at the end of the article and it is by Hoty. In this quote she explains that not everyone can have a long standing career in acting like she does. Hoty says "I've had a career in the theater and made a living at it, which is something not many people can say."
4. A. The lead was strong because it gets immediately to the point and that is that Hoty is continuing her dream.
B. The nut graph was strong because it starts to get into the theme of the play "Rich Girl."
C. The ending was strong because Hoty's message holds true to not just actors, but to people in any career path they choose. When you continue to build up your career history, you can truly be proud about yourself.
D. The story organization was average. It included great information, but there could have been more interviews (at least one or two more).
5. I really enjoyed reading this article and learning about Dee Hoty and her success.
Byline: Charles Paolino
Date: March 8, 2013.
Publication name: Home News Tribune
Link: http://www.mycentraljersey.com/article/20130308/NJENT/303080005/She-s-right-money?nclick_check=1
2. This article provides brief information about Dee Hoty and the plays she starred in like "Mama Mia." She also starred in a very popular show "Law and Order."They even provide information about the her current play and comments about being in the acting business.
3. A. The only person interviewed in this story is Dee Hoty. The interview with Hoty was essential, especially since the story is about her, but they could have interviewed some of her previous cast mates. They could have interviewed people from the television shows and old plays she starred in.
B. The vocabulary was very easy to understand. I found the sentences to be very precise and a great example of this is when the writer discusses some of the awards and plays she starred in. It states "Dee Hoty has been nominated for Tony awards for her performances in "The Will Rogers Follies," "The Best Little Whorehouse Goes Public" and "Footloose."
C. The best direct quotation is included at the end of the article and it is by Hoty. In this quote she explains that not everyone can have a long standing career in acting like she does. Hoty says "I've had a career in the theater and made a living at it, which is something not many people can say."
4. A. The lead was strong because it gets immediately to the point and that is that Hoty is continuing her dream.
B. The nut graph was strong because it starts to get into the theme of the play "Rich Girl."
C. The ending was strong because Hoty's message holds true to not just actors, but to people in any career path they choose. When you continue to build up your career history, you can truly be proud about yourself.
D. The story organization was average. It included great information, but there could have been more interviews (at least one or two more).
5. I really enjoyed reading this article and learning about Dee Hoty and her success.
Friday, March 8, 2013
Comments based on the article "Teaching Viewers to Hear the TV with Eyes Only."
1. Headline : "Teaching Viewers to Hear the TV with Eyes Only."
Byline: Brian Stelter
Date: March 8, 2013
Publication name : The New York Times.
Link : http://www.nytimes.com/2013/03/09/arts/television/teaching-viewers-to-hear-the-tv-with-eyes-only.html?ref=television&_r=0
2. This article describes how the show producer of "Switched at Birth" decided to take a spin on the show. The entire show was in sign language and in order to understand it, people had to really pay attention. This was a brilliant idea because it teaches something new to viewers and gives them a break from being addicted to their technology.
3. A. The two people interviewed in this story are Lizzy Weiss the producer of the show and Beth Haller a professor (journalism professor) from Towson University. The interviews added a spice to the story, so it definitely made the story come together great. A great example is when it states "Even as far back as Episode 2, the producers have been prepping the audience to watch a show with lots of character dialogue in sign language," Ms. Haller said, since that episode "explored how lip reading doesn't work well for most deaf people."
B. The vocabulary in the story was very easy to understand. I found sentences to be very precise and one great example is when it states " There is a vibrant subculture about singning on the Internet, which has made sign language (and foreign languages)more accessible."
C. A couple of good direct quotation were included in this story and one of them comes from Weiss. This particular quote made the story great because it is relevant to many people. Weiss says " I think TV now is so much about word-of-mouth," she said, "and I have faith that we did a lot with that episode to get people talking about the show and telling friends to start from the beginning of Netflix."
4. A. The lead was strong because it had some description, but got right to the point.
B. The nut graph was strong because Weiss explained what her intentions were while she created this episode.
C. The ending was strong because it gives viewers a new perspective on things and helps them expand their minds into watching more shows like this.
D. The story organization was strong because it explained why they chose to make the episode unique compared to the others and the interviews provided wonderful deeper information concerning the show.
5. I enjoyed everything about this piece. I enjoyed the fact that the producers did a beneficial and educational change to the show and I enjoyed reading the responses from the interview. It made me interested in learning sign language myself.
Byline: Brian Stelter
Date: March 8, 2013
Publication name : The New York Times.
Link : http://www.nytimes.com/2013/03/09/arts/television/teaching-viewers-to-hear-the-tv-with-eyes-only.html?ref=television&_r=0
2. This article describes how the show producer of "Switched at Birth" decided to take a spin on the show. The entire show was in sign language and in order to understand it, people had to really pay attention. This was a brilliant idea because it teaches something new to viewers and gives them a break from being addicted to their technology.
3. A. The two people interviewed in this story are Lizzy Weiss the producer of the show and Beth Haller a professor (journalism professor) from Towson University. The interviews added a spice to the story, so it definitely made the story come together great. A great example is when it states "Even as far back as Episode 2, the producers have been prepping the audience to watch a show with lots of character dialogue in sign language," Ms. Haller said, since that episode "explored how lip reading doesn't work well for most deaf people."
B. The vocabulary in the story was very easy to understand. I found sentences to be very precise and one great example is when it states " There is a vibrant subculture about singning on the Internet, which has made sign language (and foreign languages)more accessible."
C. A couple of good direct quotation were included in this story and one of them comes from Weiss. This particular quote made the story great because it is relevant to many people. Weiss says " I think TV now is so much about word-of-mouth," she said, "and I have faith that we did a lot with that episode to get people talking about the show and telling friends to start from the beginning of Netflix."
4. A. The lead was strong because it had some description, but got right to the point.
B. The nut graph was strong because Weiss explained what her intentions were while she created this episode.
C. The ending was strong because it gives viewers a new perspective on things and helps them expand their minds into watching more shows like this.
D. The story organization was strong because it explained why they chose to make the episode unique compared to the others and the interviews provided wonderful deeper information concerning the show.
5. I enjoyed everything about this piece. I enjoyed the fact that the producers did a beneficial and educational change to the show and I enjoyed reading the responses from the interview. It made me interested in learning sign language myself.
Comments based on the article "It's Valentino's Name, but Their Vision."
1. Headline: "It's Valentino's Name, but Their Vision."
Byline: Eric Wilson.
Date: March 8, 2013.
Publication name: The New York Times.
Link: http://www.nytimes.com/2013/03/10/fashion/valentinos-name-their-vision.html?ref=style
2. The designers of Valentino fashion line are creating new fashion pieces and they presented their ideas at a dinner in Paris, which included other top designers as well.
3. A. The people interviewed were the new designers of Valentino. These designers are Pierpaolo Piccioli and Maria Grazia Chiuri. They also interviewed Elisabeth von Thurn of Taxi, and the editor of Vogue. The research in this article includes observations and interviews. The story could incorporate a few more interview responses, but it was very interesting. The interviews made the story stand out.
B. The vocabulary in the story was very easy to understand. I found the sentences to be long, but very descriptive. An example of a very descriptive sentence is when it states "Standing in front of this table on Tuesday night were the designers who took over the Valentino label in late 2008: Maria Grazia Chiuri koh;-eyed and almost nunlike in a black dress with a white collar, and Pierpaolo Piccoli, skinny in a Sinatra suit, with a boyish face."
C. One of the best direct quotations in the article is when Piccioli describes how much he loves fashion, as well as his partner Chiuri. "We love fashion more than we love the lifestyle of fashion," Mr. Piccioli said.
4. A. The lead was very strong because of the amazing detail. It described the scenery so well, that people can fully visualize it and feel like they are actually there.
B. The nut graph was strong because it listed all the editors of fashion lines that the Valentino designers wanted to present their new ideas to.
C. The ending was strong because it ended with a quote that will make any women feel comfortable in whatever they wear. Piccioli says " Respecting women means respecting their choices."
D. The story organization was very strong because it incorporated fantastic details and great quotes.
5. I enjoyed everything about this piece. Each interview was essential to the story and the article made me feel like I was reading an actual story in a book. It was a wonderful article to read.
Byline: Eric Wilson.
Date: March 8, 2013.
Publication name: The New York Times.
Link: http://www.nytimes.com/2013/03/10/fashion/valentinos-name-their-vision.html?ref=style
2. The designers of Valentino fashion line are creating new fashion pieces and they presented their ideas at a dinner in Paris, which included other top designers as well.
3. A. The people interviewed were the new designers of Valentino. These designers are Pierpaolo Piccioli and Maria Grazia Chiuri. They also interviewed Elisabeth von Thurn of Taxi, and the editor of Vogue. The research in this article includes observations and interviews. The story could incorporate a few more interview responses, but it was very interesting. The interviews made the story stand out.
B. The vocabulary in the story was very easy to understand. I found the sentences to be long, but very descriptive. An example of a very descriptive sentence is when it states "Standing in front of this table on Tuesday night were the designers who took over the Valentino label in late 2008: Maria Grazia Chiuri koh;-eyed and almost nunlike in a black dress with a white collar, and Pierpaolo Piccoli, skinny in a Sinatra suit, with a boyish face."
C. One of the best direct quotations in the article is when Piccioli describes how much he loves fashion, as well as his partner Chiuri. "We love fashion more than we love the lifestyle of fashion," Mr. Piccioli said.
4. A. The lead was very strong because of the amazing detail. It described the scenery so well, that people can fully visualize it and feel like they are actually there.
B. The nut graph was strong because it listed all the editors of fashion lines that the Valentino designers wanted to present their new ideas to.
C. The ending was strong because it ended with a quote that will make any women feel comfortable in whatever they wear. Piccioli says " Respecting women means respecting their choices."
D. The story organization was very strong because it incorporated fantastic details and great quotes.
5. I enjoyed everything about this piece. Each interview was essential to the story and the article made me feel like I was reading an actual story in a book. It was a wonderful article to read.
Sunday, March 3, 2013
Summary based on article "9 Must -Follow Manuscript Rules."
This article provides steps/rules for writing manuscripts. The rules are the following: 1. Revise, revise, revise!. 2. Start with conflict and tension. 3. Start with the story you're telling, not with the back story. 4. Give the reader something to wonder about. 5. Avoid explaining too much too soon. 6. Make sure your story has both a plot arc and an emotional arc. 7. Read your dialogue out loud. 8. Use adjectives, adverbs and dialogue tags only sparingly. 9. Make sure your details matter. These steps can be applied to other stories as well and not just manuscripts.
Summary based on the article "10 Essential Rules of Poetry."
This article provides important rules for people that are interested in writing poetry. The ten rules are 1. Keep the poetry coming. 2.Read poetry by others. 3. Study poetic forms. 4. Attend open mics. 5. Experiment. 6. Revise. 7. Connect with other poets. 8. Share your work. 9. Submit. 10. Publish on your own.
Summary based on the article "10 Ways To Improve Your Writing While Thinking Like A Comedy Writer."
This article from the writer's digest provides some wonderful ideas to keep in my mind when writing funny stories. These ideas are the following: Hold your readers attention with incongruity, keep them on their toes, find an element worth repeating, use familiarity to your advantage, satisfy readers with a callback, employ the power of play, stretch yourself short, use the power of 10, remember nothing is off-limits, and explore yourself. These ideas were listed from order of importance and the number ten idea is to hold your readers attention with in congruity. It is important to make sure that this tip is followed in all humor based stories.
Saturday, March 2, 2013
Summary based on the article "5 Simple Steps on Creating Suspense in Fiction."
The writersdigest has a list of steps people can follow when wanting to incorporate suspense into a story. The first step is to keep the action intense. The second step is make the danger feel real. Third step keep the emotion high.Fourth step is repeat an action, phrase or event. Fifth step is hide what characters are thinking. If people follow these steps when it comes time to write, the amount of readers will increase.
Summary based on the article "Thriller Writing Made Easy: 4 Steps To Starting a Thriller."
This article provides some beneficial steps in assisting authors (or anyone that likes to write as a hobby) with creating thrillers. Thrillers may seem like that are easy to write, but it takes a lot of work. The steps listed in the article are the following :choose your rhino, formulate the what-if question, answer the what-if question, and figure out who you're going to write about. So in other words, once a writer gets their main idea going, work your way down the other steps.
Summary of the article "4 Techniques For Improving Your Writing."
This particular article from the writersdigest.com provides a list four important methods people can follow in order to make their writing more interesting and fun to read.The first method is to focus on the whole as well as the parts. Second method is put your work aside for a while and then come back to it. Third method is have someone else look your work over. Fourth is read your text aloud. These methods can also help when a writer is lost on what to write about.
Friday, March 1, 2013
Summary based on the article "16 Blogging Tips For Writing Fresh Content & Attracting Readers."
This article provides some methods people can follow when they want to make their blog stand out. Some of the tips listed are to keep your content fresh, avoid politics, religion, or anything that might offend your readers, optimize your blog, post rhythmically, and be visual. If bloggers follow these steps, they will soon see an increase in their amount of readers.
The article came from http://www.writersdigest.com/writing-articles
The article came from http://www.writersdigest.com/writing-articles
Summary based on the article "5 Steps to Book Publishing."
This article was cool and relevant to people who want to publish their work, but don't know exactly how to go about it. This article provides five steps to make publishing experience a success. These five steps are set your goals, choosing a publication package, put your best work work forward, stay in control, and publish and promote your book. No steps can be skipped, publishers need to follow them in order to get the ball rolling.
This article came from http://www.writersdigest.com/writing-articles
This article came from http://www.writersdigest.com/writing-articles
Summary based on the article "Writing Gender- Specific Language."
This article was really interesting because it provided tips on how authors can transition from male to female perspectives on stories. This article focuses on how to make dialogue more feminine or masculine (depending on the story). There were two lists of important parts that authors need to remember when writing a story. The first list included pointers for woman authors that are writing from male's perspective. These pointers involve checking for questions, explanations, feelings, details, abstractions, and approval seeking behavior. For male authors the key points are to check for advice, bragging, aggressiveness, emotions, and obliviousness. These tips can help anyone that is an author or just enjoys writing in general.
This article came from http://www.writersdigest.com/writing-articles
This article came from http://www.writersdigest.com/writing-articles
Comments based on the article "The No-Limits Job."
1. Headline: "The No-Limits Job."
Byline: Teddy Wayne
Date: March 1, 2013.
Publication: The New York Times.
Link:http://www.nytimes.com/2013/03/03/fashion/for-20-somethings-ambition-at-a-cost.html?ref=style
2. This article describes all the stress that Casey McIntyre goes through on a daily basis. She is a book publicist and her job is very draining with the long list of duties. She barely has time for any breaks and is having a hard time in balancing it all.
3. A. The people interviewed in this story are Casey McIntyre and some other writers that work on websites. They all share similar experiences in the work field (as in being overwhelmed).
B. The vocabulary was very easy to understand. I found the sentences to be very precise. One example of this is when it states "If I'm not at the office, I'm always on my Blackberry," said Casey McIntyre, 28, a book publicist in New York. "I never feel like I'm totally checked out of work."
C. There was one quote by McIntyre that I can definitely relate to. I follow the same method when I know I have a long day ahead of me and need a coffee (not more then two) to keep energized.
McIntyre states "I have coffee before I leave the house, there's a Dunkin' Donuts conveniently in the subway station when I get off, and I get another coffee during the day," she said. "And they're large coffees."
4. A. The lead was very strong, because it described the transition from having more responsibilities when you are older(related to working field), compared to when you are young.
B. The nut graph was strong because it starts off with a quote describing McIntyre's super busy schedule and regardless of where she is, she is always doing work related things.
C. The ending of the story was strong because McIntyre explains that she has to remain positive through everything no matter how tough it is.
D. The story organization was very strong because it not only focused on McIntyre, but it also incorporated experiences that other writers face while at work.
5. I enjoyed this piece because it is easy to relate to. While working a job in a career path you chose, or even being in school the work can drive someone crazy. The work continues to get worse and its feels great to have someone relate to what you are going through. I enjoyed this piece because of those reasons.
Byline: Teddy Wayne
Date: March 1, 2013.
Publication: The New York Times.
Link:http://www.nytimes.com/2013/03/03/fashion/for-20-somethings-ambition-at-a-cost.html?ref=style
2. This article describes all the stress that Casey McIntyre goes through on a daily basis. She is a book publicist and her job is very draining with the long list of duties. She barely has time for any breaks and is having a hard time in balancing it all.
3. A. The people interviewed in this story are Casey McIntyre and some other writers that work on websites. They all share similar experiences in the work field (as in being overwhelmed).
B. The vocabulary was very easy to understand. I found the sentences to be very precise. One example of this is when it states "If I'm not at the office, I'm always on my Blackberry," said Casey McIntyre, 28, a book publicist in New York. "I never feel like I'm totally checked out of work."
C. There was one quote by McIntyre that I can definitely relate to. I follow the same method when I know I have a long day ahead of me and need a coffee (not more then two) to keep energized.
McIntyre states "I have coffee before I leave the house, there's a Dunkin' Donuts conveniently in the subway station when I get off, and I get another coffee during the day," she said. "And they're large coffees."
4. A. The lead was very strong, because it described the transition from having more responsibilities when you are older(related to working field), compared to when you are young.
B. The nut graph was strong because it starts off with a quote describing McIntyre's super busy schedule and regardless of where she is, she is always doing work related things.
C. The ending of the story was strong because McIntyre explains that she has to remain positive through everything no matter how tough it is.
D. The story organization was very strong because it not only focused on McIntyre, but it also incorporated experiences that other writers face while at work.
5. I enjoyed this piece because it is easy to relate to. While working a job in a career path you chose, or even being in school the work can drive someone crazy. The work continues to get worse and its feels great to have someone relate to what you are going through. I enjoyed this piece because of those reasons.
Sunday, February 24, 2013
Summary based on the article "Tips for Public Speaking."
In the article "Tips for Public Speaking" by Teddy Wayne provides some methods people can follow in order to reduce anxiety when it comes time to make speeches. Some of the tips listed are to take a walk before the speech, focus on someone in the middle of the room, and to practice your speech. I disagree with one of the tips presented in the article. Focusing on one person is ineffective and will make the other audience members feel left out. When speaking to an audience you are supposed to get your points across and the way to do this is to look at everyone in the room. Make strong eye contact with each audience member. The other two tips listed I definitely agree with. Overall the article is beneficial for nervous speakers.
Comments based on the article "Red Carpet Trends of the Past 15 Years."
1. Headline: "Red Carpet Trends of the Past 15 Years."
Byline: Eric Wilson
Date: January 30, 2013.
Publication name: The New York Times.
Link: http://www.nytimes.com/2013/01/31/fashion/red-carpet-trends-of-the-past-15-years.html?ref=fashion
2. This article explains how the dresses celebrities wear constantly transforms over the years. The article also includes many pictures of the different hairstyles and dresses as well.
3. A. There are no interviews in this story. This story was solely based on opinions and observations. The lack of interviews made the story boring and very dry. A great example of this is when it states "Ah, the anticipation of all the frocks has come to play as significant a role at the Oscars as who goes home with an award."
B. The vocabulary was very easy to understand. The sentences were flabby and wordy. An example of this is when it states "For instance, of more than 400 gowns categorized by shape, designer and color, the most popular style over the years has been strapless, with a total of 127 examples."
C. There were no direct quotations.
4. A. The lead was okay. The lead explained how when it comes to award shoes everyone is anxious to know the designers of the gowns.
B. The nut graph was okay as well. It explained that The New York Times found photographs of the gowns from over the years.
C. The ending was extremely weak. The ending just explained how some of the outfits stood out and that was it.
D. The story organization was extremely weak because they did not have a list of the designers that created the dresses or interviews from the celebrities. The sentences were terrible.
5. I disliked everything about this piece.
Byline: Eric Wilson
Date: January 30, 2013.
Publication name: The New York Times.
Link: http://www.nytimes.com/2013/01/31/fashion/red-carpet-trends-of-the-past-15-years.html?ref=fashion
2. This article explains how the dresses celebrities wear constantly transforms over the years. The article also includes many pictures of the different hairstyles and dresses as well.
3. A. There are no interviews in this story. This story was solely based on opinions and observations. The lack of interviews made the story boring and very dry. A great example of this is when it states "Ah, the anticipation of all the frocks has come to play as significant a role at the Oscars as who goes home with an award."
B. The vocabulary was very easy to understand. The sentences were flabby and wordy. An example of this is when it states "For instance, of more than 400 gowns categorized by shape, designer and color, the most popular style over the years has been strapless, with a total of 127 examples."
C. There were no direct quotations.
4. A. The lead was okay. The lead explained how when it comes to award shoes everyone is anxious to know the designers of the gowns.
B. The nut graph was okay as well. It explained that The New York Times found photographs of the gowns from over the years.
C. The ending was extremely weak. The ending just explained how some of the outfits stood out and that was it.
D. The story organization was extremely weak because they did not have a list of the designers that created the dresses or interviews from the celebrities. The sentences were terrible.
5. I disliked everything about this piece.
Comments based on the article "The Sweet Smell of Success."
1. Headline: "The Sweet Smell of Success."
Byline: Ruth La Ferla
Date: February 22, 2013.
Publication name: The New York Times
Link: http://www.nytimes.com/2013/02/24/fashion/jessica-chastains-sweet-smell-of-success.html?_r=0&hp=&adxnnl=1&adxnnlx=1361744643-Ohk0/XLngK6QAr6VuQ4hwg
2. This article focuses on the actress Jessica Chastains and her accomplishments. The article explains how she is viewed as a fashion icon, an extremely talented actress especially in the film "Zero Dark Thirty", and her new business venture, which is beginning a perfume line. Her list of accomplishments continues to increase and people enjoy working with her.
3. A. The people interviewed in this story are Chastain herself, Jenny B.Fine the woman in charge of WWD Beauty, and Stephan Bezy manager of Yves Saint Laurent Beauté. The research brought the story together in a wonderful way and a great example of this comes from an interview by Jenny B. Fine. "When an up-and-coming actress signs with such an iconic name, it becomes part of her brand," Ms. Fine said. "It's a win-win for both parties."
B. The vocabulary was self-explanatory. The only phrase I needed to define is serendipity. On the website dictionary.reference.com they define serendipity. It states "an aptitude for making desirable discoveries by accident." I found the sentences to be precise and an example of this is when it states " One of Hollywood's most avidly courted actresses, she is bait these days for the style set as well, having shone in recent months as fashion's favorite clothes hanger."
C. There were great quotations in this article and one of them comes from Jessica herself. She says " I approach my fashion choices the same way I approach my acting choices," she said. "I don't want anyone to typecast me in a character. And I don't want anyone to say, 'This is what Jessica wears'."
4. A. The lead was very strong because it explains how journalists and celebrities immediately become anxious when she is in the room. It is a clear demonstration of the respect she receives.
B. The nut graph was strong because it begins to explain her numerous achievements.
C. The ending was very strong because it explained the recognition once again and ended with a quote from Jessica. "They're starting to recognize me now," said Ms. Chastain said."
D. The story was very strong because it incorporated interesting interviews, a list of her accomplishments, and gave amazing insight into the life of Jessica Chastain.
5. I enjoyed everything about this piece. I enjoyed reading information about what Jessica does in her career and the interviews made the story stand out even more.
Byline: Ruth La Ferla
Date: February 22, 2013.
Publication name: The New York Times
Link: http://www.nytimes.com/2013/02/24/fashion/jessica-chastains-sweet-smell-of-success.html?_r=0&hp=&adxnnl=1&adxnnlx=1361744643-Ohk0/XLngK6QAr6VuQ4hwg
2. This article focuses on the actress Jessica Chastains and her accomplishments. The article explains how she is viewed as a fashion icon, an extremely talented actress especially in the film "Zero Dark Thirty", and her new business venture, which is beginning a perfume line. Her list of accomplishments continues to increase and people enjoy working with her.
3. A. The people interviewed in this story are Chastain herself, Jenny B.Fine the woman in charge of WWD Beauty, and Stephan Bezy manager of Yves Saint Laurent Beauté. The research brought the story together in a wonderful way and a great example of this comes from an interview by Jenny B. Fine. "When an up-and-coming actress signs with such an iconic name, it becomes part of her brand," Ms. Fine said. "It's a win-win for both parties."
B. The vocabulary was self-explanatory. The only phrase I needed to define is serendipity. On the website dictionary.reference.com they define serendipity. It states "an aptitude for making desirable discoveries by accident." I found the sentences to be precise and an example of this is when it states " One of Hollywood's most avidly courted actresses, she is bait these days for the style set as well, having shone in recent months as fashion's favorite clothes hanger."
C. There were great quotations in this article and one of them comes from Jessica herself. She says " I approach my fashion choices the same way I approach my acting choices," she said. "I don't want anyone to typecast me in a character. And I don't want anyone to say, 'This is what Jessica wears'."
4. A. The lead was very strong because it explains how journalists and celebrities immediately become anxious when she is in the room. It is a clear demonstration of the respect she receives.
B. The nut graph was strong because it begins to explain her numerous achievements.
C. The ending was very strong because it explained the recognition once again and ended with a quote from Jessica. "They're starting to recognize me now," said Ms. Chastain said."
D. The story was very strong because it incorporated interesting interviews, a list of her accomplishments, and gave amazing insight into the life of Jessica Chastain.
5. I enjoyed everything about this piece. I enjoyed reading information about what Jessica does in her career and the interviews made the story stand out even more.
Thursday, February 14, 2013
Interesting information learned based on a description of English Proverbs from the website phrases.org.uk
On the website phrases.org.uk, they have a section where they provide information regarding English Proverbs and how it is used in everyday language. I learned that besides the word "good" being used all the time (in daily conversations and in some writing pieces), that the word "never" is also being over used. I also learned something interesting regarding proverbs. In the section titled "English Proverbs", it states that " Proverbs are short and pithy sayings that express some traditionally held truth. They are usually metaphorical and often, for the sake of memorability, alliterative."
They also provide a huge list of popular sayings that use proverbs. These proverbs are also over used. There are a few that I recognized from films (like "Forest Gump" ) or reality shows (Like "Mob Wives)." These two sayings include "Blood is thicker than water" and "Stupid is as stupid does." Not only is this list of various proverbs, but they are also cliches. These sayings can be heard anywhere.
They also provide a huge list of popular sayings that use proverbs. These proverbs are also over used. There are a few that I recognized from films (like "Forest Gump" ) or reality shows (Like "Mob Wives)." These two sayings include "Blood is thicker than water" and "Stupid is as stupid does." Not only is this list of various proverbs, but they are also cliches. These sayings can be heard anywhere.
Comments based on the article "Steve Madden is Back."
1. Headline: " Steve Madden is Back."
Byline: Laura M. Holson
Date: Feb. 13, 2013
Publication name: The New York Times. Fashion and Style.
Link: www.nytimes.com/2013/02/14/fashion/steve-madden-is-back.html?pagewanted1&_r=0&ref=style.
2. This particular article explains how Steve Madden is working on his business once again after serving jail time for stock fraud. His jail sentence was of almost three years and he is making up for lost time.
3. A. The people interviewed in this story are Steve Madden, his wife, and Marshall Cohen who works for a consumer company. The research in the story provided background information regarding what Madden was charged with and his sentence.
There was also information from interviews that were people close to Madden, who explained that he is still respected regardless of what he did to end up in prision. Madden also explained his side so that made the story great as well. One of the most important quotes came from Madden himself. In this particular statement he explains how terrible it was being in jail and the knowledge he gained from this experience. Madden states " It is a unique painful experierence that I had and I don't know how everybody reacts. I guess you get perspective, a different sort. I feel for things, I suppose." Mostly though, he said, " I thought about surviving."
B. The vocabulary used in the story was very easy to understand. I found all the sentences to be precise. A great example of a straight forward sentence is when it states "Collaboration can be tough, sure-but it beats sharing a jail cell, wondering if you can eveer rebuild the life you've left behind."
C. One of the best quotations comes from Madden. He says that " My impulse was to jump right in, but I had to lay back, watch, learn and see what needed to be fixed," Mr. Madden said. "So much of design is context."
4. A. The lead was very strong because it drew you in. It included great descriptive words and as soon as you read the lead, you want to go on to the rest of the story.
B. The nut graph was strong because it started to explain how being in jail took him away from his business. After the nut graph it starts to explain his charges and etc.
C. The ending was strong because the quote explained how when he was gone, his wife helped with the shoe business. He had someone on his side.
D. The story organization was very strong because it incorporated a lot of important information, some comedy, and great interviews.
5. I enjoyed everything about the piece and I never knew what happened to Steve Madden. Reading this story was very informative for me.
Byline: Laura M. Holson
Date: Feb. 13, 2013
Publication name: The New York Times. Fashion and Style.
Link: www.nytimes.com/2013/02/14/fashion/steve-madden-is-back.html?pagewanted1&_r=0&ref=style.
2. This particular article explains how Steve Madden is working on his business once again after serving jail time for stock fraud. His jail sentence was of almost three years and he is making up for lost time.
3. A. The people interviewed in this story are Steve Madden, his wife, and Marshall Cohen who works for a consumer company. The research in the story provided background information regarding what Madden was charged with and his sentence.
There was also information from interviews that were people close to Madden, who explained that he is still respected regardless of what he did to end up in prision. Madden also explained his side so that made the story great as well. One of the most important quotes came from Madden himself. In this particular statement he explains how terrible it was being in jail and the knowledge he gained from this experience. Madden states " It is a unique painful experierence that I had and I don't know how everybody reacts. I guess you get perspective, a different sort. I feel for things, I suppose." Mostly though, he said, " I thought about surviving."
B. The vocabulary used in the story was very easy to understand. I found all the sentences to be precise. A great example of a straight forward sentence is when it states "Collaboration can be tough, sure-but it beats sharing a jail cell, wondering if you can eveer rebuild the life you've left behind."
C. One of the best quotations comes from Madden. He says that " My impulse was to jump right in, but I had to lay back, watch, learn and see what needed to be fixed," Mr. Madden said. "So much of design is context."
4. A. The lead was very strong because it drew you in. It included great descriptive words and as soon as you read the lead, you want to go on to the rest of the story.
B. The nut graph was strong because it started to explain how being in jail took him away from his business. After the nut graph it starts to explain his charges and etc.
C. The ending was strong because the quote explained how when he was gone, his wife helped with the shoe business. He had someone on his side.
D. The story organization was very strong because it incorporated a lot of important information, some comedy, and great interviews.
5. I enjoyed everything about the piece and I never knew what happened to Steve Madden. Reading this story was very informative for me.
Wednesday, February 13, 2013
Comments based on "Everything but the Cook."
1. Headline: "Everything but the Cook."
Byline: by Julia Moskin
Date: Feb.12, 2013
Publication: The New York Times
Link: http://www.nytimes.com/2013/02/13/dining/the-dinner-kit-is-served.html?ref=dining&_r=0
2. The article "Everything but the Cook" is about this famous chef, known as Nick Taranto devloping a meal kit for people that are too busy to cook dinner every night. This kit includes the following: Couscous, vegetable broth, dates, carrots, onions, cilantro, prunes and much more. This is Taranto's big help to the public.
3. A. The people interviewed in this story are Taranto, John Leeman, who is in charge of Fresh Direct
and Laura Shapiro author of a book based on cooking.
B. The vocabulary in this article were easy to understand. A majority of the article is written in a precise manner, but there is one sentence that was very wordy. It could be shorten down or seperated into two sentences. The sentence is the following: " Hello Fresh , owned by the German e-commerce giant Rocket Internet, delivers more than 10,000 boxes a week in Germany, the Netherlands, the United Kingdom and Australia, and has expanded its reach in the United States from Maine to Florida."
C.The best direct quote is from Taranto how cooking is in the sense draining. It states that "When we started jobs in New York we realized that cooking dinner is really, really hard", said Mr.Taranto said of himself and his business partner Josh Hix, 31. (They often cooked together in graduate school). "There's not enough time in modern lives to recipe-select or grocery-shop."
4. A. The lead was strong because it had a conversational style and it summarizes what the content will be in the article.
B. The nut graph was strong because it explains information about the dinner kit.
C. The ending was sort of confusing. The quote did not support Taranto's idea about the dinner kit. It went against it.
D. The story organization was great because it incorporated information mostly relevant to the story and it included different opinions from people.
5. I enjoyed this overall piece, but the ending could have been changed. It could have been more supportive of this beneficial idea.
Byline: by Julia Moskin
Date: Feb.12, 2013
Publication: The New York Times
Link: http://www.nytimes.com/2013/02/13/dining/the-dinner-kit-is-served.html?ref=dining&_r=0
2. The article "Everything but the Cook" is about this famous chef, known as Nick Taranto devloping a meal kit for people that are too busy to cook dinner every night. This kit includes the following: Couscous, vegetable broth, dates, carrots, onions, cilantro, prunes and much more. This is Taranto's big help to the public.
3. A. The people interviewed in this story are Taranto, John Leeman, who is in charge of Fresh Direct
and Laura Shapiro author of a book based on cooking.
B. The vocabulary in this article were easy to understand. A majority of the article is written in a precise manner, but there is one sentence that was very wordy. It could be shorten down or seperated into two sentences. The sentence is the following: " Hello Fresh , owned by the German e-commerce giant Rocket Internet, delivers more than 10,000 boxes a week in Germany, the Netherlands, the United Kingdom and Australia, and has expanded its reach in the United States from Maine to Florida."
C.The best direct quote is from Taranto how cooking is in the sense draining. It states that "When we started jobs in New York we realized that cooking dinner is really, really hard", said Mr.Taranto said of himself and his business partner Josh Hix, 31. (They often cooked together in graduate school). "There's not enough time in modern lives to recipe-select or grocery-shop."
4. A. The lead was strong because it had a conversational style and it summarizes what the content will be in the article.
B. The nut graph was strong because it explains information about the dinner kit.
C. The ending was sort of confusing. The quote did not support Taranto's idea about the dinner kit. It went against it.
D. The story organization was great because it incorporated information mostly relevant to the story and it included different opinions from people.
5. I enjoyed this overall piece, but the ending could have been changed. It could have been more supportive of this beneficial idea.
Saturday, February 9, 2013
Comments based on the article "In Camp, Reading 'Les Miserables' "
1. Headline: "In Camp, Reading 'Les Miserables' "
Byline: Louis P.Masur
Date: Feb.9, 2013.
Publication name: The New York Times The Opinion Pages.
Link: http://opinionator.blogs.nytimes.com/2013/02/09/in-camp-reading-les-miserables/
2. The article titled "In Camp, Reading 'Les Miserables' " provides a deeper explanation of the story behind 'Les Miserables'. It discusses information about the Civil War, the July Revolution from the 1830's, and other battles as well. The writer explains some information about the author.
3. A. The writer did a little research into the history of this story.The author of the story was also interviewed, but with only question. The comments were very cruel from other readers. There was barely any history. For example, he only discusses the author's history in one line. It states that "He was an opponent of slavery, and in 1859 defended John Brown. "Insurrection," he said, was a "sacred duty."
B. The vocabulary used was very easy to understand, but the sentences were confusing. A perfect example, is when it states that "Perhaps the most dramatic example of how the novel filtered into the imagination of the solider cane from Wilky James, the younger brother of William and Henry James." This sentence could be phrased much better. It makes no sense.
C. There were no good quotes. There were mostly negative comments concerning the book.A perfect example of the most negative comment states that " There is a great deal of trash mixed with the good: long and worthless episodes, not sufficiently connected with the story," claimed the Christian Advocate.
4. A. The lead was very weak because it just mentions when the story was published. That information should be included later on in the story, instead of in the beginning.
B. The nut graph was filled with cruel comments.It was a very weak and negative lead.
C. The ending was very weak because it just had a long passage that could have been shortened.
D. The story organization was weak and made no sense. It was all over the place if it was review and is supposed to make authors understand the story, it did a terrible job at it.
5. I disliked the entire piece. It lacked history about the author. It lacked information about his other published works and incorporated all negative comments. The passage was five miles long and it made the story drag.
Byline: Louis P.Masur
Date: Feb.9, 2013.
Publication name: The New York Times The Opinion Pages.
Link: http://opinionator.blogs.nytimes.com/2013/02/09/in-camp-reading-les-miserables/
2. The article titled "In Camp, Reading 'Les Miserables' " provides a deeper explanation of the story behind 'Les Miserables'. It discusses information about the Civil War, the July Revolution from the 1830's, and other battles as well. The writer explains some information about the author.
3. A. The writer did a little research into the history of this story.The author of the story was also interviewed, but with only question. The comments were very cruel from other readers. There was barely any history. For example, he only discusses the author's history in one line. It states that "He was an opponent of slavery, and in 1859 defended John Brown. "Insurrection," he said, was a "sacred duty."
B. The vocabulary used was very easy to understand, but the sentences were confusing. A perfect example, is when it states that "Perhaps the most dramatic example of how the novel filtered into the imagination of the solider cane from Wilky James, the younger brother of William and Henry James." This sentence could be phrased much better. It makes no sense.
C. There were no good quotes. There were mostly negative comments concerning the book.A perfect example of the most negative comment states that " There is a great deal of trash mixed with the good: long and worthless episodes, not sufficiently connected with the story," claimed the Christian Advocate.
4. A. The lead was very weak because it just mentions when the story was published. That information should be included later on in the story, instead of in the beginning.
B. The nut graph was filled with cruel comments.It was a very weak and negative lead.
C. The ending was very weak because it just had a long passage that could have been shortened.
D. The story organization was weak and made no sense. It was all over the place if it was review and is supposed to make authors understand the story, it did a terrible job at it.
5. I disliked the entire piece. It lacked history about the author. It lacked information about his other published works and incorporated all negative comments. The passage was five miles long and it made the story drag.
Friday, February 8, 2013
Comments on the article "The Asian Wave".
1. Headline: "The Asian Wave."
Byline: Suzy Menkes.
Date: Feb.8, 2013.
Publication name: The New York Times.
Link: http://www.nytimes.com/2013/02/09/fashion/the-asian-wave-in-fashion.html?ref=fashion
2. The article "The Asian Wave" explains how one designer named Jason Wu from Taiwan, is making his presence known all over the world. There are many famous people wearing his clothing and Mrs.Obama is one of them.
3. A. The people interviewed was Wu and other designers that are very familiar with his work. The research made the story good because it provided some information about his passion and also the recognition he receives in his home town. In this particular quote, Wu is explaining the welcoming he received when going back home. It says that "Recently I went back to Taiwan and was honored and surprised by how proud people were of my success," says Mr.Wu.
B. The vocabulary in the story was very easy to understand. It was very precise and very well composed. For example, it states that "The real difference between this generation of designer's creative energy is invested in a mass of products from the get-go."
C. There were many good quotations because they came from reliable sources. One of the best quotes in the story is when Mr.Wu says "Growing up, fashion and the arts were considered a relevant career choice and I hope that my work will inspire the new generation to be a bit more open-minded and creative."
4. A. The lead was strong because it already started to discuss how Asian designers are making a huge difference in fashion world.
B. The nut graph was strong because it started to discuss what businesses he is involved in regarding fashion.
C. The ending was strong because it used a strong metaphor. The metaphor was comparing the Chinese new year to Asian designers making a huge success.The ending statement was the following " However China's new Year of the Snake is viewed, it can be expected to mark fame and prosperity for American designers with Asian roots."
5. I liked everything about the piece. I enjoyed reading the interviews and learning more about new Asian designers. I also found it amazing that Mrs.Obama wore the design.
Byline: Suzy Menkes.
Date: Feb.8, 2013.
Publication name: The New York Times.
Link: http://www.nytimes.com/2013/02/09/fashion/the-asian-wave-in-fashion.html?ref=fashion
2. The article "The Asian Wave" explains how one designer named Jason Wu from Taiwan, is making his presence known all over the world. There are many famous people wearing his clothing and Mrs.Obama is one of them.
3. A. The people interviewed was Wu and other designers that are very familiar with his work. The research made the story good because it provided some information about his passion and also the recognition he receives in his home town. In this particular quote, Wu is explaining the welcoming he received when going back home. It says that "Recently I went back to Taiwan and was honored and surprised by how proud people were of my success," says Mr.Wu.
B. The vocabulary in the story was very easy to understand. It was very precise and very well composed. For example, it states that "The real difference between this generation of designer's creative energy is invested in a mass of products from the get-go."
C. There were many good quotations because they came from reliable sources. One of the best quotes in the story is when Mr.Wu says "Growing up, fashion and the arts were considered a relevant career choice and I hope that my work will inspire the new generation to be a bit more open-minded and creative."
4. A. The lead was strong because it already started to discuss how Asian designers are making a huge difference in fashion world.
B. The nut graph was strong because it started to discuss what businesses he is involved in regarding fashion.
C. The ending was strong because it used a strong metaphor. The metaphor was comparing the Chinese new year to Asian designers making a huge success.The ending statement was the following " However China's new Year of the Snake is viewed, it can be expected to mark fame and prosperity for American designers with Asian roots."
5. I liked everything about the piece. I enjoyed reading the interviews and learning more about new Asian designers. I also found it amazing that Mrs.Obama wore the design.
Thursday, February 7, 2013
Comments based on the article "Getting Models Into Fighting Shape."
1. A. Headline: "Getting Models Into Fighting Shape."
B. Byline: Courtney Rubin.
C. Date: Feb. 6, 2013.
D. Publication name: New York Times.
E. Link: http://www.nytimes.com/2013/02/07/fashion/getting-models-into-fighting-shape.html?ref=style&_r=0
2. The article titled "Getting Models Into Fighting Shape" discusses different work out methods that the trainer Michael Olajide Jr. uses on models. Rubin also includes the names of the famous models Olajide trained and the results.
3. A. The people interviewed in this story were the trainer,teenage models and the president of Marilyn Agency. The story included a lot of information from the trainer regarding models he worked with and etc. The story also included personal experiences and the names of famous patients would be the story great. One of the best quotes from someone interviewed besides the trainer, is the following: "The British model Nyasha Matonhodze, 18, started working out at Mr.Olajide's gym at her agency's recommendation. "As models, we know that we have to be, some would say, ridiculously thin," she said. "It's not exact;y a woman's shape, but it is high fashion."
B. The vocabulary was very easy to understand. I found the article to be precise. For example, it states that "Chris Gay, the president of Marilyn Agency, New York, said that the modeling agency has had "a lot of success with sending our girls to this classes prior to fashion week." This particular quote gets right to the point. It was very direct.
C. There were many good quotations and in one of them is when Mr. Olajide says that " You've got to get your body hot if you want to burn calories and lose that weight." It made the story good because that is true. I agree with what the trainer said.
4. A. The lead was strong because it summarized the story. It explained how models go to him for help because he is the best trainer.
B. The nut graph was strong because it explained what his workout consist of.
C. The ending was strong because it explained a true statement, but in sort of a metaphorical way.
D. The story organization was very strong because there was great research (including interviews and the explanation of his workouts). The author also used previous experiences models had during the workouts and list of celebrities, which more the story pop.
5. I enjoyed the research and interviews in this piece.
B. Byline: Courtney Rubin.
C. Date: Feb. 6, 2013.
D. Publication name: New York Times.
E. Link: http://www.nytimes.com/2013/02/07/fashion/getting-models-into-fighting-shape.html?ref=style&_r=0
2. The article titled "Getting Models Into Fighting Shape" discusses different work out methods that the trainer Michael Olajide Jr. uses on models. Rubin also includes the names of the famous models Olajide trained and the results.
3. A. The people interviewed in this story were the trainer,teenage models and the president of Marilyn Agency. The story included a lot of information from the trainer regarding models he worked with and etc. The story also included personal experiences and the names of famous patients would be the story great. One of the best quotes from someone interviewed besides the trainer, is the following: "The British model Nyasha Matonhodze, 18, started working out at Mr.Olajide's gym at her agency's recommendation. "As models, we know that we have to be, some would say, ridiculously thin," she said. "It's not exact;y a woman's shape, but it is high fashion."
B. The vocabulary was very easy to understand. I found the article to be precise. For example, it states that "Chris Gay, the president of Marilyn Agency, New York, said that the modeling agency has had "a lot of success with sending our girls to this classes prior to fashion week." This particular quote gets right to the point. It was very direct.
C. There were many good quotations and in one of them is when Mr. Olajide says that " You've got to get your body hot if you want to burn calories and lose that weight." It made the story good because that is true. I agree with what the trainer said.
4. A. The lead was strong because it summarized the story. It explained how models go to him for help because he is the best trainer.
B. The nut graph was strong because it explained what his workout consist of.
C. The ending was strong because it explained a true statement, but in sort of a metaphorical way.
D. The story organization was very strong because there was great research (including interviews and the explanation of his workouts). The author also used previous experiences models had during the workouts and list of celebrities, which more the story pop.
5. I enjoyed the research and interviews in this piece.
Friday, February 1, 2013
Material learned in class
New material from Jan.30, 2013 class
In today's class we learned a lot of new material. We learned a new phrase and it was cogent. On the website daily writing tips.com they define the word cogent as "convincing or believable". We also learned a new writing tool from and that is to begin sentences with subjects followed by verbs. We also learned some important information regarding when it comes to writing stories. Some of this information included, always being accurate when you write, being objective, being attentive to your audience, and to use your vocabulary accordingly.
In today's class we learned a lot of new material. We learned a new phrase and it was cogent. On the website daily writing tips.com they define the word cogent as "convincing or believable". We also learned a new writing tool from and that is to begin sentences with subjects followed by verbs. We also learned some important information regarding when it comes to writing stories. Some of this information included, always being accurate when you write, being objective, being attentive to your audience, and to use your vocabulary accordingly.
Recent material learned in class
From class on Jan. 28, 2013.
In the lecture we learned a few things. We learned a new word and the word was silhouette. The definition of silhouette from the website daily writing tips.com, is the outline of someone or something. We also learned a new grammar tip and this tip regards to making a sentence in a story less confusing. The proper way to make the story less confusing is to edit it. During my experience in working for the Middlesex County College newspaper Quo Vadis, I would copy edit stories and there were times when I found statements to be very confusing or too wordy. In order to change it, I would break up the sentences. If words were mispelled I would fix them so the story made sense. The story had to flow properly so the reader is not lost when reading the piece. We also learned the meaning of the word nut graph. I remember hearing the phrase in the past, but did not have it fully explained to me. A nut graph is your purpose for writing the story. Nut graphs need to be present in every story in order to make it a big hit.
In the lecture we learned a few things. We learned a new word and the word was silhouette. The definition of silhouette from the website daily writing tips.com, is the outline of someone or something. We also learned a new grammar tip and this tip regards to making a sentence in a story less confusing. The proper way to make the story less confusing is to edit it. During my experience in working for the Middlesex County College newspaper Quo Vadis, I would copy edit stories and there were times when I found statements to be very confusing or too wordy. In order to change it, I would break up the sentences. If words were mispelled I would fix them so the story made sense. The story had to flow properly so the reader is not lost when reading the piece. We also learned the meaning of the word nut graph. I remember hearing the phrase in the past, but did not have it fully explained to me. A nut graph is your purpose for writing the story. Nut graphs need to be present in every story in order to make it a big hit.
Comments on the feature article "Xu, Liangying, Scientist and Adocate, Dies at 92."
1. Headline: "Xu Liangying, Scientist and Advocate, Dies at 92."
Byline: Chris Buckley
Date: Jan.31, 2013.
Publication name: The New York Times. Asia Pacific.
Link: http://www.nytimes.com/2013/02/01/world/asia/xu-liangying-92-scientist-and-democracy-advocate.html?ref=science&_r=0
2. Summary: The feature article titled "Xu Liangying, Scientist and Advocate, Dies at 92" explains the story about a particular scientist who enjoyed the work of Einstein and created his own publications using Einstein as a role model. The article also briefly explains his life and how he inspired other people during his life time.
3. A. The people interviewed in this article with previous soldiers that knew Liangying. The writer also incorporated previous interviews Liangying had with a magazine, known as Caijing in China. The research made the story a good read. Not only were there interviews, but the fact that they included history of this scientist made the story flow even better. There was an interesting piece of his history regarding his educational background and when he started to become fascinated by Einstein. It states that " He entered Zhejiang University in 1939, determined, he wrote on his entrance form, to become an "authority of modern physics." As a high school student he had read "The World as I See It", a collection of Einstein's essays."
B. The vocabulary in this article was very easy to understand. It was not flabby or wordy. The writer gets directly to the point. For example, it states that "Mr.Xu's studies were disrupted by the invading Japanese Army, which forced his school to shift from place to place and exposed him to the brute disparities of rural life." It explains what happened to him during school and the reason.
C. There were a couple of good direct quotations. One of the best quotations comes from Liangying himself when he is speaking to the Caijing magazine. It states "Superstition is the great enemy of truth", he told a Chinese magazine, Caijing, last year. "We must use science and democracy to eradicate modern superstitions of every kind, to eradicate superstitions that are born of loyalty."
4.A. The lead was very strong because it briefly explained who the person was and when he passed away. The lead summarized what the content in the rest of the article will be about, which is extremely important when writing a lead.
B. The nut graph was strong because it briefly explained facts about what he was involved in and how his life was immediately changed (like a damper on his plans) because of the army.
C. The ending was very strong because it provided information about the huge award he won for all of his accomplishments.
D. The story was very strongly organized because it explained important facts about his life and there were also interviews from people that knew him very closely.
5. I enjoyed everything about this piece. I enjoyed learning interesting information about this man's life, his accomplishments, learning about his role model, and his big reward.
Byline: Chris Buckley
Date: Jan.31, 2013.
Publication name: The New York Times. Asia Pacific.
Link: http://www.nytimes.com/2013/02/01/world/asia/xu-liangying-92-scientist-and-democracy-advocate.html?ref=science&_r=0
2. Summary: The feature article titled "Xu Liangying, Scientist and Advocate, Dies at 92" explains the story about a particular scientist who enjoyed the work of Einstein and created his own publications using Einstein as a role model. The article also briefly explains his life and how he inspired other people during his life time.
3. A. The people interviewed in this article with previous soldiers that knew Liangying. The writer also incorporated previous interviews Liangying had with a magazine, known as Caijing in China. The research made the story a good read. Not only were there interviews, but the fact that they included history of this scientist made the story flow even better. There was an interesting piece of his history regarding his educational background and when he started to become fascinated by Einstein. It states that " He entered Zhejiang University in 1939, determined, he wrote on his entrance form, to become an "authority of modern physics." As a high school student he had read "The World as I See It", a collection of Einstein's essays."
B. The vocabulary in this article was very easy to understand. It was not flabby or wordy. The writer gets directly to the point. For example, it states that "Mr.Xu's studies were disrupted by the invading Japanese Army, which forced his school to shift from place to place and exposed him to the brute disparities of rural life." It explains what happened to him during school and the reason.
C. There were a couple of good direct quotations. One of the best quotations comes from Liangying himself when he is speaking to the Caijing magazine. It states "Superstition is the great enemy of truth", he told a Chinese magazine, Caijing, last year. "We must use science and democracy to eradicate modern superstitions of every kind, to eradicate superstitions that are born of loyalty."
4.A. The lead was very strong because it briefly explained who the person was and when he passed away. The lead summarized what the content in the rest of the article will be about, which is extremely important when writing a lead.
B. The nut graph was strong because it briefly explained facts about what he was involved in and how his life was immediately changed (like a damper on his plans) because of the army.
C. The ending was very strong because it provided information about the huge award he won for all of his accomplishments.
D. The story was very strongly organized because it explained important facts about his life and there were also interviews from people that knew him very closely.
5. I enjoyed everything about this piece. I enjoyed learning interesting information about this man's life, his accomplishments, learning about his role model, and his big reward.
Wednesday, January 30, 2013
Comments based on the third feature article " A City Drenched in Sugar".
1. Headline: "A City Drenched in Sugar".
Byline: Julia Moskin
Date:January 29, 2013.
Publication name: The New York Times
Link: http://www.nytimes.com/2013/01/30/dining/king-cakes-abound-in-new-orleans.html?ref=style&_r=0
2. Summary: The feature article " A City Drenched in Sugar" describes the different scrumptious sweets that is created in New Orleans. It explains how many traditional recipes the bakeries follow to create their cakes. The article also provides a detailed description of a particular cake known as "King Cake". The "king cakes" are usually very popular during Mardi Gras. The article also includes some history regarding when sugar started to be produced in New Orleans.
3. A. The people interviewed in this feature article was the person in charge of one of the most popular bakeries in New Orleans, which is the Buttermilk Drop Bakery and Cafe. They also interviewed a co-owner of the bakery Debbie Does Doberge. Two residents of New Orleans who are frequent customers at bakery shops.
The research made the story come together very well. When the writer Moskin decided to interview the owners of two bakeries, it gave a deeper insight into how passionate they are about their products. For example, it states that "I don't want to do anything else but eat cake," declared Charles Mary, the co-owner of Debbie Does Doberge, a tiny cottage business run by Mr.Mary with girlfriend, Charlotte Mc Gehee."
It also states that " Ms.Mc Gehee who has described herself as "a little O.C.D.", has made the doberge even more complex, with eight layers of cake, pudding and fruit filling, and glass-smooth icing that enrobes the outside."
B. The vocabulary in the story was easy to understand. The feature piece was not too wordy, it was very descriptive and included a lot of essential information. It was a wonderful read. One of the most essential pieces in this feature, is when it starts to describe the history of sugar for New Orleans. It states " The region has been coated in the stuff since the 18th century, when spectacular fortunes were amassed on the French-and British- owned sugar plantations all along the River Road between New Orleans and Baton Rouge."
C. There were a couple of direct quotations, but one of them stood out the most and brought the whole story together. It states that " New Orleans is a sugar town, always has been," said Dwight Henry, the owner of the Buttermilk Drop Bakery and Cafe in the Seventh Ward, who has been baking here for more than 30 years." It was the perfect way to start off the story.
4. A. The lead was very strong because it immediately explained how eating cake in New Orleans is basically a tradition.
B. The nut graph was very strong because it demonstrated that old fashioned traditions continue to be followed every day.
C. The ending could have been a little better. They writer could have used another quote for the ending, instead of incorporating a quote reading the price of one of the king cakes.
D. A majority of the story was very strong and it incorporated great information. It was very detailed and it was perfect to include quotations from the residents and owners of bakeries in New Orleans. The ending could have been much better. Overall the story was a captivating piece.
5. I enjoyed learning the history of sugar plantations in New Orleans and I also enjoyed learning about the different sweets there as well.
Byline: Julia Moskin
Date:January 29, 2013.
Publication name: The New York Times
Link: http://www.nytimes.com/2013/01/30/dining/king-cakes-abound-in-new-orleans.html?ref=style&_r=0
2. Summary: The feature article " A City Drenched in Sugar" describes the different scrumptious sweets that is created in New Orleans. It explains how many traditional recipes the bakeries follow to create their cakes. The article also provides a detailed description of a particular cake known as "King Cake". The "king cakes" are usually very popular during Mardi Gras. The article also includes some history regarding when sugar started to be produced in New Orleans.
3. A. The people interviewed in this feature article was the person in charge of one of the most popular bakeries in New Orleans, which is the Buttermilk Drop Bakery and Cafe. They also interviewed a co-owner of the bakery Debbie Does Doberge. Two residents of New Orleans who are frequent customers at bakery shops.
The research made the story come together very well. When the writer Moskin decided to interview the owners of two bakeries, it gave a deeper insight into how passionate they are about their products. For example, it states that "I don't want to do anything else but eat cake," declared Charles Mary, the co-owner of Debbie Does Doberge, a tiny cottage business run by Mr.Mary with girlfriend, Charlotte Mc Gehee."
It also states that " Ms.Mc Gehee who has described herself as "a little O.C.D.", has made the doberge even more complex, with eight layers of cake, pudding and fruit filling, and glass-smooth icing that enrobes the outside."
B. The vocabulary in the story was easy to understand. The feature piece was not too wordy, it was very descriptive and included a lot of essential information. It was a wonderful read. One of the most essential pieces in this feature, is when it starts to describe the history of sugar for New Orleans. It states " The region has been coated in the stuff since the 18th century, when spectacular fortunes were amassed on the French-and British- owned sugar plantations all along the River Road between New Orleans and Baton Rouge."
C. There were a couple of direct quotations, but one of them stood out the most and brought the whole story together. It states that " New Orleans is a sugar town, always has been," said Dwight Henry, the owner of the Buttermilk Drop Bakery and Cafe in the Seventh Ward, who has been baking here for more than 30 years." It was the perfect way to start off the story.
4. A. The lead was very strong because it immediately explained how eating cake in New Orleans is basically a tradition.
B. The nut graph was very strong because it demonstrated that old fashioned traditions continue to be followed every day.
C. The ending could have been a little better. They writer could have used another quote for the ending, instead of incorporating a quote reading the price of one of the king cakes.
D. A majority of the story was very strong and it incorporated great information. It was very detailed and it was perfect to include quotations from the residents and owners of bakeries in New Orleans. The ending could have been much better. Overall the story was a captivating piece.
5. I enjoyed learning the history of sugar plantations in New Orleans and I also enjoyed learning about the different sweets there as well.
Tuesday, January 29, 2013
Comments based on the feature "A Teenager with a Stylist."
1. Headline: "A Teenager with a Stylist."
Byline: By Bee- Shyuan Chang
Date: January 25, 2013
Publication name: The New York Times.
Link:
2. Summary: The feature article titled "A Teenager with a Stylist" they talk about the young woman actress Chloe Grace Moretz, who is the star of the show "The Carrie Diaries." The article also mentions some of the films she is participating in this year. It also explains which fashion trends she follows and fashion events she attends.
3. A. There were no official interviews answers, but it is clear that Moretz was interviewed. The writer also used observations to create the story as well.
B. Some of the phrases used in this feature piece needed to be defined by the writer. One of the phrases was the name of a movie. The film title was "Movie 43." The second phrase was the name of a place. The place mentioned was Plaza Athenee. The third and final phrase was brogues.
On the website rottentomatoes.com, they provide brief information about the film "Movie 43". It says that " From the twisted minds of producers Peter Farrelly (Hall Pass, Shallow Hall) and Charles Wessler (There's Something About Mary, Dumb and Dumber) comes Movie 43 the outrageous new ensemble comedy starring some of the biggest names in Hollywood."
On the website reference.com they define where Plaza Anthenee is and they also define the word brogue. As for Plaza Anthenee it says that "The Plaza Anthenee is a hotel in Paris, France. It is located at 25 Avenue Montaigne, near the champs Elysees and the Eiffel Tower. It is part of the Dorchester Collecction group of international luxury hotels." As for the last word brogues, it says that "Brogues, often known as wingtips in the United States, are low-heeled shoes made of heavy leather, originating in Scotland and Ireland as a coarse, usually untanned leather shoe. The term wingtip derives from from the toe cap pattern, which forms a w and resembles the profile of spreading bird wings."
I found some of the sentences to be very wordy, but there is one sentence that stands out the most. This particular sentence talks about what Moretz ate for breakfast and the outfit she wore. It says that "Finally, I did get dressed for eggs Benedict downstairs and put on black fitted jeans from Aeropostale (I'm a brand ambassador there) that I rolled up to the ankles and a white, black and blue button-down shirt from Topshop."
C. There were no direct quotations in this feature article.
4. A. The lead was very weakly written. It discusses when Moretz started acting and it is not necessarily relevant to the story.
B. The nut graph was strong because it explains what her stylist does to help her with fashion choices for upcoming activities.
C. The ending of the story was very weak. The ending just mentioned what she did during a dinner. It did not mention anything interesting or important.
D. The story was decent. The writer should have incorporated quotes, created a better lead, and a more interesting ending.
5. The story was all over the place. First it discussed movies she Moretz will star in, then clothing styles, fashion events she attends, and when she goes to dinner. If the story is supposed to be about Moretz fashion styles then focus on that. If the writer wanted to provide some information about the actress and what she stars in, she could simply say she stars in one of the most recent biggest TV show hits "The Carrie Diaries."
Byline: By Bee- Shyuan Chang
Date: January 25, 2013
Publication name: The New York Times.
Link:
2. Summary: The feature article titled "A Teenager with a Stylist" they talk about the young woman actress Chloe Grace Moretz, who is the star of the show "The Carrie Diaries." The article also mentions some of the films she is participating in this year. It also explains which fashion trends she follows and fashion events she attends.
3. A. There were no official interviews answers, but it is clear that Moretz was interviewed. The writer also used observations to create the story as well.
B. Some of the phrases used in this feature piece needed to be defined by the writer. One of the phrases was the name of a movie. The film title was "Movie 43." The second phrase was the name of a place. The place mentioned was Plaza Athenee. The third and final phrase was brogues.
On the website rottentomatoes.com, they provide brief information about the film "Movie 43". It says that " From the twisted minds of producers Peter Farrelly (Hall Pass, Shallow Hall) and Charles Wessler (There's Something About Mary, Dumb and Dumber) comes Movie 43 the outrageous new ensemble comedy starring some of the biggest names in Hollywood."
On the website reference.com they define where Plaza Anthenee is and they also define the word brogue. As for Plaza Anthenee it says that "The Plaza Anthenee is a hotel in Paris, France. It is located at 25 Avenue Montaigne, near the champs Elysees and the Eiffel Tower. It is part of the Dorchester Collecction group of international luxury hotels." As for the last word brogues, it says that "Brogues, often known as wingtips in the United States, are low-heeled shoes made of heavy leather, originating in Scotland and Ireland as a coarse, usually untanned leather shoe. The term wingtip derives from from the toe cap pattern, which forms a w and resembles the profile of spreading bird wings."
I found some of the sentences to be very wordy, but there is one sentence that stands out the most. This particular sentence talks about what Moretz ate for breakfast and the outfit she wore. It says that "Finally, I did get dressed for eggs Benedict downstairs and put on black fitted jeans from Aeropostale (I'm a brand ambassador there) that I rolled up to the ankles and a white, black and blue button-down shirt from Topshop."
C. There were no direct quotations in this feature article.
4. A. The lead was very weakly written. It discusses when Moretz started acting and it is not necessarily relevant to the story.
B. The nut graph was strong because it explains what her stylist does to help her with fashion choices for upcoming activities.
C. The ending of the story was very weak. The ending just mentioned what she did during a dinner. It did not mention anything interesting or important.
D. The story was decent. The writer should have incorporated quotes, created a better lead, and a more interesting ending.
5. The story was all over the place. First it discussed movies she Moretz will star in, then clothing styles, fashion events she attends, and when she goes to dinner. If the story is supposed to be about Moretz fashion styles then focus on that. If the writer wanted to provide some information about the actress and what she stars in, she could simply say she stars in one of the most recent biggest TV show hits "The Carrie Diaries."
Monday, January 28, 2013
Comments on the first feature article from New York Times
1. Headline: How a Queen's Home Became a Cradle of the Gay Rights Movement.
Byline: David W.Dunlap
Date: January 21, 2013
Publication name: New York Times
Link: http://cityroom.blogs.nytimes.com/2013/01/21/in-queens-an-unlikely-and-cozy-landmark-of-the-early-gay-rights-movement/
2. Summary of the article: In the article "How a Queen's Home Became a Cradle of the Gay Rights Movement they explain how one family changed the lives of gay individuals. The Manford family from Queen's, NY welcomed gay individuals into their homes. These gay individuals, consisted of people who had a tough time telling their family the truth about who they preferred to be with regarding relationships. When the end result was bad after coming clean, they needed a place to stay so the Manford family took them in.
3. A. The people interviewed were friends of the Manford family and the current owner of the home. The research made the story interesting, because the friends that were interviewed were very close with the family. They lived around the same time and they were able to explain the love that these gay individuals felt while living at the Manford house.
B. The vocabulary in this feature piece was very descriptive and engaging. There were similies also that made the story even more captivating. There was one sentence that I found to be flabby and wordy. In the article "How a Queen's Home Became a Cradle of the Gay Rights Movement" Dunlap drags on when he mentions students at school that are supposedly distracting and very loud.
C. There was one direct quotation that was not necessarily bad, but needed to be more defined. The quotation is the following: "It was a very Ozzie-and-Harriet-type house,"recalled Allen Roskoff, a friend of Morty Manford. It needs more defining because many people especially in their early 20's and 30's do not know what or who Ozzie and Harriet are. It is important to define terms that may be confusing to the readers because the best newspaper is one that people can relate to.
4. A. The lead was very strong because it immediately made the readers feel extremely sad inside because of the disrespect and abandonment these people faced from their "supposedly loved ones."
B. The nut graph was strong because it explained how wonderful these people felt being in the Manford home.
C. The ending was strong because it explains that regardless that the Manfords are long gone and there are no gays staying there anymore, their presence is still very strong. The compassion is still present.
D. The story organization was strong because it incorporated numerous important factors. It included interviews from people that knew the family and of the situation that went on during that time period. The writer also did a lot of research in finding out the history of this particular family and the struggles they faced. The writer also had a beautiful ending to the story. Throughout the entire story, different emotions are developed inside the readers that range from happiness to sadness and so on.
5. I enjoyed the piece because it shows that anyone can get through any obstacle in their life with the necessary support. It shows that people don't need to feel alone because someone will always be there.
Byline: David W.Dunlap
Date: January 21, 2013
Publication name: New York Times
Link: http://cityroom.blogs.nytimes.com/2013/01/21/in-queens-an-unlikely-and-cozy-landmark-of-the-early-gay-rights-movement/
2. Summary of the article: In the article "How a Queen's Home Became a Cradle of the Gay Rights Movement they explain how one family changed the lives of gay individuals. The Manford family from Queen's, NY welcomed gay individuals into their homes. These gay individuals, consisted of people who had a tough time telling their family the truth about who they preferred to be with regarding relationships. When the end result was bad after coming clean, they needed a place to stay so the Manford family took them in.
3. A. The people interviewed were friends of the Manford family and the current owner of the home. The research made the story interesting, because the friends that were interviewed were very close with the family. They lived around the same time and they were able to explain the love that these gay individuals felt while living at the Manford house.
B. The vocabulary in this feature piece was very descriptive and engaging. There were similies also that made the story even more captivating. There was one sentence that I found to be flabby and wordy. In the article "How a Queen's Home Became a Cradle of the Gay Rights Movement" Dunlap drags on when he mentions students at school that are supposedly distracting and very loud.
C. There was one direct quotation that was not necessarily bad, but needed to be more defined. The quotation is the following: "It was a very Ozzie-and-Harriet-type house,"recalled Allen Roskoff, a friend of Morty Manford. It needs more defining because many people especially in their early 20's and 30's do not know what or who Ozzie and Harriet are. It is important to define terms that may be confusing to the readers because the best newspaper is one that people can relate to.
4. A. The lead was very strong because it immediately made the readers feel extremely sad inside because of the disrespect and abandonment these people faced from their "supposedly loved ones."
B. The nut graph was strong because it explained how wonderful these people felt being in the Manford home.
C. The ending was strong because it explains that regardless that the Manfords are long gone and there are no gays staying there anymore, their presence is still very strong. The compassion is still present.
D. The story organization was strong because it incorporated numerous important factors. It included interviews from people that knew the family and of the situation that went on during that time period. The writer also did a lot of research in finding out the history of this particular family and the struggles they faced. The writer also had a beautiful ending to the story. Throughout the entire story, different emotions are developed inside the readers that range from happiness to sadness and so on.
5. I enjoyed the piece because it shows that anyone can get through any obstacle in their life with the necessary support. It shows that people don't need to feel alone because someone will always be there.
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